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雅思写作犯罪类话题一直是考生们比较头疼的一类话题,今天Alfie老师带着大家一起,分析一篇犯罪类话题的范文。
 
先看题目:
Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and tv can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?(2017.5.25)





这是一篇关于该不该禁止媒体对犯罪进行详细报道的题目。属于媒体+犯罪类话题。这类题思考方向比较简单,就是媒体报道犯罪的影响。有人认为有好的影响,那就写不同意,认为影响不好,那就写同意。本篇文章采用部分同意的观点。这混乱的尘世,究竟充斥了多少绝望和悲伤。你想去做一个勇敢的男子,为爱,为信仰,轰轰烈烈的奋斗一场。


开头段: It is sometime argued whether mass media should not be allowed elaborating details of committing crimes. In my opinion, the media should be constrained in the amount of details they report in terms of the adverse impact which it exerts on individuals and society.

第一句改写题目引出话题,该不该限制媒体详细报道犯罪。
第二句直接表明观点, 考虑到它带来的问题,应该限制。
开头段在改写标题引出题目后一定要明确的表达出个人的观点。 如果没有明确的个人观点,会很大程度上影响文章的得分。

词汇学习

Mass media 大众媒体

commit crime 犯罪  

Adverse impact 负面影响  

in terms of  在….方面

常用句式

It is sometime argued whether….  是否。。。人们有争议。


主体段一:There are several reasons why this kind of press coverage should be restricted. Firstly, it makes the victims suffer the nightmare again, which may lead them to be afflicted with psychological problems. Such as anxiety, depressing. Secondly, some would-be criminals may have an opportunity to practice those illegal behaviors. For example, malefactors can easily grasp the details and processes of how to break into a door, rob a female, when they watch or read the press coverage. Finally, these news may give the public an illusion that the community and city where they live is unsafe, which makes it difficult for people to trust others, even they know each other. 

这段采取了罗列式的方式,对支持限制媒体报道提出了三个理由:1对受害者的二次伤害,2给潜在罪犯模仿的就会,3以及让公众不安。并对三个理由做了简单的解释。
罗列式的段落扩展方式是一种非常好的形式,它降低了考生们的写作难度,毕竟,像三个观点加以简单解释要比一个观点充分论证要容易一些。当然,这种方式也需要考生们能想出三个不错且相互直接没有关联的观点。

词汇学习 

Press coverage 新闻报道    

victim 受害者 

Suffer the nightmare  遭受噩梦

psychological problems 心理问题

Illegal behaviors  违法行为

would-be criminals 潜在的罪犯

Malefactors  罪犯

高分搭配

Be afflicted with  遭受 。。。  

have opportunity to do 有机会做某事

Give an illusion 给一个错觉


主体段二:Of course, to some extent, detailed descriptions of crimes do serve the purpose of preventing some potential crimes, such as robbery, kidnaper. This is because citizens would keep an eye on the similar situations which they saw on the screen. Therefore, it would effectively reduce the incidence of serious crimes. In other words, people’s awareness of crime would increase because of these news coverage. However, these limited benefits can also be obtained by other efficient and direct methods instead of at the expense of others’ misery.

这段采取了让步的形式,表面媒体报道可能会有一些好处的。居民的应为媒体保底提高了警惕,可以阻止一些潜在的犯罪行为。段落的最后,提出一个简单的反驳。表面主要的观点依然是支持限制。
 
折中式的段落结构式是建议各位同学们学习结构,它相对比较简单,对于观点的思考比较容易。 需要注意的是,建议同学们在写让步段落的时候,把它放在第三段,保证第二段是自己的主要支持的观点,从而能和开头的观点能紧密联系在一起。

词汇学习

Potential crime 潜在的犯罪

incidence of serious crime  犯罪的发生率 

高分搭配

Server the purpose of   达到。。。的目的 

keep an eye on 密切注意 

At the expense of 以。。。为代价。


结尾:In conclusion, although clear reports about crimes in the media can play certain roles in preventing crimes, I am convinced that restricting this kind of media would reduce the side-effects on individuals and society.
结尾段只需要简单的复述自己的观点。 注意不要和开头重复就行

常用句式

am convinced that ... 我确信。。。。


以上就是一篇犯罪类话题文章分析。同学们可以参照我们的分析,尝试自己完成一篇以下话题的作文,3月31日前提交给小助手,可以获得免费的批改哦~

It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?


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