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7月10日雅思大作文示范写作|成年人教育更重要?
发布来源: 新航道天津学校 发布时间:2021-07-27


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 本期作者:朱玲娇


2021年7月10雅思大作文题目


The education of young people is highly prioritised in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


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范文及解析


Introduction

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Traditionally, education of young children is always given the top priority in the majority of nations, but prioritising the instruction for illiterate adults is highly recommended by some educationalists. Personally, I fully advocate such recommendation and deem that the corridors of power should allocate more budgets to this.


【解析】教育类话题,需对接受教育的群体进行讨论。注意题干中的more important,说明具体论述时,是否该给成年人扫盲需要与未成年人教育进行对比。站边同意。

▷ illiterate adj. 不会读写的,文盲的

▷ corridors of power n. 权利走廊(= government)


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Body 1

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Admittedly, it is justifiable for some to refute such proposal for the reason that some adults, especially the elderly or those who are engaged in repeated low-skilled work, seem to earn their daily sustenance based on abundant experience without barriers, even though they are unable to read or write. Besides, in comparison with young children, who are at their best stage to assimilate new techniques and thus can be easily nurtured into elites in sundry domains, adults are more likely to be inhibited by self-consciousness, consequently incurring the low learning efficiency. However, the aforementioned argument holds no water, which indicates that behind education of adults are more gains.


【解析】让步:理由1:一些老人或者从事重复性工作低技术的人是否识字不影响其生活;理由2:小孩更有可塑性,与其相比,成年人已经错过最佳学习时期,可能导致学习效果与投入不成正比。

▷ refute vt. 驳斥

▷ assimilate vt. 吸收

▷ elite n. 精英

▷ hold no water 站不住脚


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Body 2

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The apparent argument in its favour is that such policy can definitely bring convenience to those undereducated people in their daily life. To illustrate, there are either instances where the senior easily get lost in the elaborate network of metros since they fail to understand the instructions or cases where people showing ignorance of dosage and warnings misuse the medication, thus spawning tragedies. Hence, wiping out illiteracy for adults should be prioritised. // Additionally, if illiterate adults seize such chance to acquire new working techniques, especially when robots are gradually replacing them to do those repeated work, they will secure a more decent job, and the whole society can thus enjoy a more vigorous workforce.


【解析】从生活和工作两方面进行好处的阐述

▷ undereducated adj. 未受良好教育的

▷ elaborate adj. 复杂的

▷ ignorance n. 无知

▷ spawn vt. 酿成(贬义)

▷ wipe out illiteracy 扫除文盲

▷ secure vt. 获得


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Conclusion

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To recapitulate, eradicatingilliteracy facilitates the nation to increase economic diversification and optimise industrial structure. Therefore, authorities should invest funds in the education of non-literate adults.


【解析】重申观点

▷ recapitulate v. 总结

▷ eradicate illiteracy 扫除文盲

▷ optimise vt. 优化


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