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恨没早点看到,今天雅思写作原题的高分范文在这里·犯罪类
发布来源: 英语写作邵教授 发布时间:2020-01-04


2020年第一场雅思写作考试,用的是这本书上的题目!两年前邵教授就请雅思写作9分的英国人写了范文。

虽然无法证明范文的分数是多少,但是可以证明范文是由能考到多少分的人写的。


邵教授和英国老师的交流记录:



出于保护隐私的考虑,以及担心官方会判定滥用成绩单,所以英国老师没有直接分享成绩单,而是将成绩单上传到了国外权威网站。如果想看雅思官网成绩,可以私底下索要。


  • 2020年1月4日雅思写作考题 In some countries, the crime trials in a law court are shown on the television and the public can watch them. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?



关键词汇


justice


1) The quality of being just; fairness(例句 In the interest of justice, we should treat everyone the same.) 公正

2)  The attainment of what is just, especially that which is fair, moral, right, merited, or in accordance with law(例句 My client has not received justice in this hearing.) 正义(我个人的理解)

3) The upholding of what is just, especially fair treatment and due reward in accordance with honor, standards, or law 法制


英国人写的范文及范文解析




开头段


It is debatable whether or not criminal trials should be shown on television for the public to watch. There are the interests of justice to consider, but also the interests of the people involved in the trial. Those sets of interests are equally important, but they may potentially be in conflict. 


是否应该让公众在电视上观看犯罪审判,有争议。这关系到了法制,但也关系到了审判涉及的人。这两组厉害关系同等重要,但是它们可能有潜在的冲突。


Opening up the workings of a criminal court to the eyes of the public seems like it would guarantee honesty and justice. The question is whether the loss of privacy and safety and security of those involved is too big a price to pay.

让法庭的运作机制公开在公众的眼皮底下,似乎能保证诚实和公平。问题是,相关的人失去隐私和安全,这样的代价是不是太高了。

(这个自然段较长,为了方便阅读就分成了2个部分)




主体段1(好处)


One advantage of televising criminal trials is that the judge and the lawyers would feel obliged to behave honorably and truthfully at all times. The public would be able to be certain that the truth were being told, that proper court procedure were being followed, and that justice were being done.

电视播放犯罪审判的一个好处是法官和律师将不得不一直表现得正直可敬。公众才能确定他们讲述的都是事实,遵守了正规的法律程序,正义得以伸张。





主体段2(坏处)


Disadvantages of showing such trials on public television include the problem that the jury, and witnesses, would need to be kept safe from criminals who wish to silence them. There would be no privacy for the people involved in the case. It would be doubly necessary for the police to be seen to catch and severely punish anyone who threatens or harms any person involved in a court case.

在电视上播放犯罪审判的坏处包括,陪审团和证人必须得到安全保障,因为犯罪分子会想要封他们的口。案件相关的人员是没有隐私的。那些威胁或者伤害案件相关人员的人,让警察去抓获,严惩,并公之于众,就更是必须的了。




结尾段


In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of televising criminal trials outweigh the disadvantages. It is already the case that jury members, and key witnesses, are exposed and in danger from unscrupulous criminals. 

总结,我认为电视播放犯罪审判是利大于弊的。陪审团成员和关键证人,本来就已经暴露了,毫无节操的犯罪分子本来就有可能加害于他们。


But it is important for judges and legal professionals to be held accountable for the way they practice law and uphold justice. The best way to ensure accountability is to expose the internal workings to the public and make them easy to see. Even those who judge are not immune from being themselves judged.

法官和法律方面的专家实施法律和维持正义的方式,由他们自己承担责任,这一点很重要。最好的保证这种责任到位的方法就是让公众能够轻易地了解(法律的)内部机制。甚至是法官自己也应该受到别人的评判(虽然法官通常都是评判别人)。



邵教授对范文的说明


好处减少作弊的可能性

坏处陪审团和证人的安全问题,案件相关所有人员失去隐私

让步和反驳即使审判不在电视上播放,陪审团和证人也是暴露了的(出庭就会暴露);陪审团和证人得到警方的保护,就能解决问题(提出解决方案的反驳方式)。




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